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===My name is Danni Lin. I was born in Taizhou China. I am a lovely girl with an active and optimistic mind, and I love to smile to everyone. I think everyday is memorable and fantastic in my life. I have a sweet family. My parents always support me, and we live together happily. I am a girl who loves sports very much. I always dream that I can have a chance to join the Olympic Game someday. Unfortunately, for some reason the dream became an impossible dream. Everyone has their dreams in heart, so do I. I want to be a business woman in the future. In 2011, my parents sent me to the Winchendon School in U.S. for study to get high quality education. I perfer to study in U.S. because it has a good study enviroment. If I redouble my efforts, I believe that my dream will translate into reality.===

===I was born in a happy family. My family does not require me to get any reward. They give me everything they can. They give me a lot of love. They spent a lot of money to send me to U.S. for study because they hope I can have a wonderful future. My family members are the most important people in my life. My grandfather was a soldier and took part in the Chinese War of Liberation when he was young. He retired from the army when he was 70 years old, but he still lived an army life at home. My grandfather ruled me strictly and always took me to climb the mountain. When I was a little kid, he made me do something I did not like to do because he did not want me to waste time on playing. I used to hate him and did not listen to him in order to make him angry; however, my grandfather treated me really well. He always went to the farm to get fresh strawberries for me and never blamed me.One day, when we went to climb the mountain, it suddenly rained. I had a fever and nearly lost my conscience. My grandfather was really anxious, but there is no taxi to take. My grandfather was concerning that the longer I spend in the rain the worse I got, so he just carried me on his back and ran to the hospital. Grandfather spent the whole day taking care of me, he was so tired that he fell sleep as soon as he laid on the bed. However, such a good man died when I was 6 years old. I was too young to feel the sadness that my parents had. Now I grew up and understand everything that my grandpa had done for me, I'm so glad to have those precious days with him.===

===Two years ago, I was a girl who loves sports very much. I think sports was very important in my life. I got the highest sports grade among the girls in my class and did exercise with my father every day. I thought sports gave me energy and helped me feel confident. I always had a dream that one day I can join the Olympic Game. When I was thinking about that, I felt excited. Unfortunately, this dream became achievable. Oneday, we had sports game in the afternoon, I was one of the runner for the 100-meter race. When I was near to the finishing line, I fell to the ground and fainted because of some small stones. When I woke up, I found I was laying in bed of the hospital. I didn’t remember what happened, I just felt pain and I can’t move my back. I realized I got a seriously injury. My parents told me my back got injured, and I can no longer do exercise like before. I cried loudly because I felt despair. I spent a lot of time for the treatment. I uttered a cry of pain, but I have to insist. My friends came up with many ideas for comforting me, we went shopping and ate a lot of delicious food, it make me feel much better. Since then, I never ran in the playground or play tennis with my dad. Now, when I see someone enjoying their sports, I admired them and imagine I can do the same thing. When I came to Winchendon school, I followed my friends to take pictures for the year book. I learned many photographing skills from him and gradually fell in love with taking pictures. I feel very good when I'm taking pictures for those smiling people. ===

==Now I'm studying in the Wichendon school and got a pretty good improvement in English. I want to say thank you to my teachers. Ms. Claude and Mrs. Magay are my favorite teachers in the Winchendon school. They encourage me to speak up in class, and m y teachers said that confidence is half of success. In my Reading and Writing class, I am very quiet and shy. I want to thank my teacher, Mrs.Magay because she gave me the confidence to speak up. She also helped me to fix my grammar mistakes. I like trying to speak more English in every classes because it is good for me to improve my spoken English. I think once I get confidence, I will possess the courage and strength to overcome many difficulties. Without confidence one cannot do great in anything.==

==I have made many decisions in my life, but the most important ones have dealt with business. For me to choose business early was the best decision that i have made. I selected business as a major because it would give me a chance to make a better life in the future. My father is a successful business man. When I was child, I like to watch my father sat his office. I chose business as a major because it was the one discipline that I know I would love. I am interest everything about business. I want developed my interest in economic for my fature career choice.==

==I love my fantastic and charmful life. I enjoyed everything in my life. I understand that studying will be demanding and challenging, but I am convinced that it will give me the best chance to achieve my goal. All in all, I am ready to achieve my dreams.==

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